tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post2471818660608146553..comments2024-01-17T20:12:02.408-08:00Comments on BOOK LOVER: WEP: Unraveled Yarndolorahhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-39628656780428973242018-07-03T08:28:32.296-07:002018-07-03T08:28:32.296-07:00Such a different world than the one I live in righ...Such a different world than the one I live in right now. Fun getting into a different mind set.Crystal Collierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03912469552483168148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-76534633476826077642018-07-03T02:59:49.721-07:002018-07-03T02:59:49.721-07:00Donna,
I have the attention span of a toddler and...Donna,<br /><br />I have the attention span of a toddler and you held mine with your near 1000-word count flash piece. Well done! You did an excellent job creating a scene that became visible in my mind, leaving me with a sense of warmth of community. :)Cathy Kennedyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01738079671642137018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-13263744466953895512018-07-02T15:30:07.444-07:002018-07-02T15:30:07.444-07:00Interesting scene with the store and the volunteer...Interesting scene with the store and the volunteer fire department. Deborah Druckerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05649396302648104610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-80800336830801267662018-06-26T00:55:35.919-07:002018-06-26T00:55:35.919-07:00Desk49: A farmer's life is full of unexpected ...Desk49: A farmer's life is full of unexpected intrigue.<br /><br />Elizabeth: yes! But is he the true Hero of this snippet?<br /><br />Ty: thanks. Missing you this month :)<br /><br />Adura: yep, these are odd people, lol.<br /><br />Mike: oh, umm, yeah. 50 acres just flowed nicely off the fingertips, lol. But at least 3000 is required for this level of income to support that awesome tractor. Thanks. I'll fix it after the winners are announced and call it a typo, lol.<br /><br />JH: I always fight these challenges, but really love the end creation usually.<br /><br />DG: ya know, I always remind my children of exactly the decisions they will have to make in any special ops or assassin employment. They just see the glory of the Games. Watching programs like 0 dark thirty put that in perspective for them. Supernatural powers aside, I think all military is a Hero.<br /><br />jaya: thanks<br /><br />Chris: thank youdolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-8783073471701110262018-06-25T09:27:05.836-07:002018-06-25T09:27:05.836-07:00An interesting tale, with a well, thought out sett...An interesting tale, with a well, thought out setting. Well done. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02149946316421950169noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-38288814838191535062018-06-25T09:00:18.137-07:002018-06-25T09:00:18.137-07:00Nice story. The setting was so vivid.
http://trai...Nice story. The setting was so vivid.<br /><br />http://trailbrooklane.blogspot.com/2018/06/unraveled-yarn.htmlJayahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05053043951887070129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-72586368584174235482018-06-22T19:02:49.653-07:002018-06-22T19:02:49.653-07:00Very realistic country setting. I'm not much o...Very realistic country setting. I'm not much of a country girl and I am not fond of small towns. Something seems a bit strange about how you said it was never Mike's fault when the recovery failed, and the fact that he seemed oblivious to dangerous situations. Was he suffering from PTSD? Perhaps he was trying to do something to counter the guilt he may have from doing the SEAL job. Killing is a large part of it when a rescue is done in a military zone. An interesting entry. I like long short stories, too. Well done.D.G. Hudsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06213237734772028645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-67567083128969231672018-06-22T13:53:16.817-07:002018-06-22T13:53:16.817-07:00Awesome story, Donna. Short fiction is always fun....Awesome story, Donna. Short fiction is always fun. This is a great reminder I need to write more of it.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing it with us!J.H. Moncrieffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18045467689291025137noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-75140485291662957192018-06-22T08:28:32.677-07:002018-06-22T08:28:32.677-07:00John Deere? Good use of iconic tractor name. Mike ...John Deere? Good use of iconic tractor name. Mike Shirley is also a solid country name (I've liked the name "Shirley" since Airplane). I also like your use of metaphor. "Rumble" rivals the "thunder." That's good.<br /><br />You also nail the setting well. For some reason, it's not a stretch for me to instantly believe that the narrator has got a police scanner. That's just a given in small towns.<br /><br />Fifty acres seems kind of small to take on employees. My dad and I had a farm that was fifty acres and managed it just fine with us two for eighteen years. Fifty acres typically doesn't generate much money either. We're talking $10,000 for an entire growing season.<br /><br />I like this story overall. Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-45189258409700409542018-06-21T14:10:41.624-07:002018-06-21T14:10:41.624-07:00Interesting backdrop of the country, Donna. There&...Interesting backdrop of the country, Donna. There's something not quite right with Mike. Can't wait to find out what it is. Or maybe Del is the weird one, really. The mind boggles.<br /> <br /><br />I'd eat stale muffins if I'm hungry enough. Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-55100272597985109172018-06-21T08:18:11.257-07:002018-06-21T08:18:11.257-07:00I love this entry! It's perfect! The character...I love this entry! It's perfect! The characterization of both Del and Mike is superbly shown through their actions and words. Excellent writing! I'm not participating this month, but you've got my vote! Tyrean Martinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15356604721537744361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-3828955865181709572018-06-21T00:07:34.913-07:002018-06-21T00:07:34.913-07:00What a great character. He'd make for a hero i...What a great character. He'd make for a hero in a novel any day!Elizabeth Seckmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00045076826326574984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-75277771836163754862018-06-20T23:54:35.400-07:002018-06-20T23:54:35.400-07:00A good story
for life on the land
where things re...A good story <br />for life on the land<br />where things really happen<br />to family and friends<br />desk49https://www.blogger.com/profile/05795159954019523527noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-85203615711349304432018-06-20T20:14:03.380-07:002018-06-20T20:14:03.380-07:00Alex: thanks
Hilary: right! You live in farm coun...Alex: thanks<br /><br />Hilary: right! You live in farm country now, lol.<br /><br />Clem: thanks, wasn't easy.<br /><br />Yolanda: Be well.<br /><br />Pat G: takes all kinds, I guess :)<br /><br />EC: lol, I'm a Baptist at heart!<br /><br />Olga: I like him too.<br /><br />Pat H: bored farmers can be the worst gossips!!<br /><br />Natalie: thank you<br /><br />Dx: I don't like coffee, but can relate when it comes to flat Diet Pepsi.<br /><br />Nila; thank you. Stale muffins are not as disgusting as stale donuts, lol.<br /><br />dolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-47223437657290965042018-06-20T19:43:33.662-07:002018-06-20T19:43:33.662-07:00Your stories are always enjoyable, a great pleasur...Your stories are always enjoyable, a great pleasure to read. I loved the descriptions. And the formidable characterisation. Not just Mike and Del but also of the two boys in just two sentences. Whatever is going on with the casino bus I hope Mike can put it right... <br /><br />Very atmospheric, somewhat mysterious and wholly delicious, including the stale muffins. A superb take on the prompt.Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-19177923604868110692018-06-20T16:48:17.899-07:002018-06-20T16:48:17.899-07:00You're right Donna. This could be expanded int...You're right Donna. This could be expanded into a much longer story. But even in 999, you created a snappy, atmospheric tale which I'm sure will continue to unravel. Love the characterisation. Spot on. We all know a Mike and Del and stale muffins. But stale coffee in a pot is a shot I'd rather do without LOL.<br /><br />Thanks for your great entry for WEP. Awesome!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-74806289304592760642018-06-20T15:55:48.290-07:002018-06-20T15:55:48.290-07:00Really interesting story. I liked the characters a...Really interesting story. I liked the characters a lot. Thanks for sharing!Natalie Aguirrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03756087804171246660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-31187321083802841152018-06-20T14:44:27.300-07:002018-06-20T14:44:27.300-07:00Hmmm could surely be something deeper there. Sure ...Hmmm could surely be something deeper there. Sure got the small town down indeed. I dreaded when I saw some people coming to my old work place, as they'd just sit and yap about the same nonsense day in, day out.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-3182273657222174112018-06-20T14:32:55.837-07:002018-06-20T14:32:55.837-07:00Interesting and a bit mysterious. What is going on...Interesting and a bit mysterious. What is going on with the casino bus?<br />Your Mike is such a character.Olga Godimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00358026814685611301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-45282673572558209022018-06-20T12:10:59.685-07:002018-06-20T12:10:59.685-07:00Smiling broadly. And wondering why it is that I t...Smiling broadly. And wondering why it is that I think that the Mennonites have a point.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-31960179737069356752018-06-20T11:48:54.592-07:002018-06-20T11:48:54.592-07:00An ex-navy seal as a farmer. A delightful story t...An ex-navy seal as a farmer. A delightful story that I enjoyed.<br /><br />Shalom aleichem,<br />Pat G Pat Garciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04204650731843984192noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-90071843658529122522018-06-20T10:27:37.847-07:002018-06-20T10:27:37.847-07:00When you see Mike it means all hell is going to br...When you see Mike it means all hell is going to break loose. Great setting. You nailed it!<br /><br />I am on the mend and writing is still the goal!<br />Yolanda Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09085436784133103221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-48696206757682734712018-06-20T09:16:30.286-07:002018-06-20T09:16:30.286-07:00Wow! Did I enjoy reading this. Really. The charac...Wow! Did I enjoy reading this. Really. The characterization was spot on, and I knew these people after only 999 words. Great job.cleemckenziehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15456109243453726483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-81029166960381755882018-06-20T07:53:22.868-07:002018-06-20T07:53:22.868-07:00Hi Donna - this was a fun story ... and now I keep...Hi Donna - this was a fun story ... and now I keep seeing tractors - made all the more sense ... I hope you're going to elaborate this ... as Alex says could definitely be some more here ... take care - cheers HilaryHilary Melton-Butcherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596532480645510678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1002680784886524881.post-17571757960144238892018-06-20T03:24:29.443-07:002018-06-20T03:24:29.443-07:00Sounds like a guy who knows what he's doing an...Sounds like a guy who knows what he's doing and likes to take charge. Although there could be something more going on...<br />Like the atmosphere. You nailed the country setting.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com