Thursday, August 22, 2019

WEP/IWSG flash challenge: Red Wheelbarrow

Hey y'all


 I've nearly run out of time to post my submission for the Write Edit Publish/IWSG August challenge; Red Wheelbarrow. I had a story started for this prompt, a nicely bloody tale that needed some editing and - slashing to fit the 1000 word count. The MC just would not cooperate however, and finally I had to give up on the flash and go with a short story. Ten year old developing serial killers can be so needy and attention seeking!

So here I am, posting at the last minute with a hurriedly thrown together flash. I don't know where this story came from - I was watching Disney's Epic as I wrote it. I know, the TV should have been off, but I can't stand silence when I'm writing and music would have been a bigger distraction.

Hope you enjoy twisted fairy tales. No Denise, no blood in this, hence the lack of reader warning, lol.

word count: 868
full critique acceptable

FAIRY JAM

“What happened next Granny?”

“Well, that part is unclear. The little Fairy hid a long time under the red wheel barrow. So long in fact, that the sun was nearly set before she dared peek out. But then,” Granny’s voice lowered and she leaned closer to the troll girl’s bed of rocks.

Gwenda leaned forward, her eyes almost humanly round and wide.

“Then,” Granny drawled, pinching the blanket of moss for dramatic effect. “A firefly buzzed around the wheel barrow, and then another, and another. And then the voices.”

Gwenda shrank back with a horrified gasp. “Was it . . Children?”

“Yeesss! Two boys and three girls. They carried nets, and glass jars with screw top lids. They laughed and squealed at the sight of the fireflies, jumping all around and over the wheel barrow. They stomped, and leaped, kicking the sides and handles of the barrow. It got darker and darker, and only the tails of the fireflies lit the garden area where the Fairy cowered in fear.”

Granny scooted back into her rocker, picked up a fried human ear, dipped it in sludge and chewed noisily. Mimicking the scared Fairy, Gwenda clutched her favorite petrified rat and tried to sink deeper into the rock pillow.

“Scared?” Granny asked brushing crumbs from her lips.

Gwenda shook her head, dislodging an earwig that had gotten stuck in the crevice of her neck. Granny’s scary stories were the best park of spending the day.

“Good girl. Now where was I? Oh yes. The little Fairy was trapped under the red wheel barrow, the Children racing all around, chasing the fireflies.”

“Did they catch them? The fireflies? Why can’t they just turn off their tails and disappear into the dark.”

“Oh yes, they caught them. The fireflies can turn off their lights, but they are too stupid to do so for long. They think the flashes ward off predators. Even us Rock Trolls dare not eat a firefly, they are poisonous even to us.”

“But aren’t the Children predators?” Gwenda sat boulder straight, pulling her knobby knees into her chest.

“Not like us. They just don’t know any better. Children think its just fun.” Granny dipped another ear and offered it to Gwenda.

Gwenda nibbled on a lobe, then asked; “Did the Children run away after they caught the fireflies?” She would be very disappointed if they did.

“No, no. Once they had the fireflies in a jar they wanted to watch the bugs flash about. So the boys reached down, gripped the edge of the wheel barrow, and flipped it on its wheel.”

“They let the Fairy escape?”

Granny laughed, a soothing sound like boulders rolling down a cliff. “They did not know she was there, now did they?”

Gwenda thumped the side of her head to dislodge the rocks weighing down her thinking. Of course the Children did not know the Fairy was there. They were preoccupied with the fireflies.

“Luckily, the Fairy was too shocked at her sudden release to immediately take flight. She was still clinging to a paint chip when one of the girls hopped inside, she nearly squished the Fairy with fingers.”

Gwenda licked her lips at the thought of Fairy jam. Blue Fairies were tastiest, but red ones were rare so worth the faint sweetness. “What color was she Granny?”

“Huh? Oh, green, I think. Green apple.” Suddenly Granny dropped her half eaten ear back into the gourd and shoved it away. She must have been thinking about Fairy jam too.

“But she didn’t get squished.”

“Nope. The Girl Child screamed and pulled her hand away. The Fairy jumped high, flapped her wings twice, and dashed straight into a jar one of the boys had quickly grabbed. Then he closed the lid tight and held it up for all the Children to see.”

“I wish I could see her in that jar,” Gwenda said angrily, rubbing her fingers together in a squishing motion. “Maybe it was the Fairy that released my butterflies.”

“Hehehe. Maybe.” Granny peered at the dimming stalagmites above Gwenda’s bed. “Grampy’s closing the cave, dawn is coming. Its time for all good Trolls to get some sleep.” She leaned over the bed to kiss Gwenda’s nose.

“But the story Granny! I have to know what happened.”

“I’ll finish tomorrow. I promise.”

“I get to stay another night? Yipee!!” Gwenda rolled around her rock bed, grinding small stones with her knees and elbows.

Granny gave a grin the size of a cave mouth and turned to leave.

Gwenda was pulling the moss snugly around her when the rocks in her head shifted again and she had a sudden thought. “Granny, is this a true story? How do you know about the little Fairy and the Children?”

Granny winked. “Perhaps, perhaps not. You know how unreliable bats can be. Good morning little one.”

Gwenda yawned, her thoughts drifting to a red wheel barrow she had seen near a human farm the night before. If it was still there, the little Fairy might still be trapped in the jar.

She fell asleep dreaming of green apple Fairy Jam, and the gossip the Bats would spread about Gwenda’s great battle with the monstrous Children.

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This writing is part of the WEP/IWSG bi-monthly flash challenge. Click on this link for a list of other participants and challenge rules.

32 comments:

  1. You did a great job. Definitely a contender, I'm sure.

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  2. Smiling broadly.
    And wishing I had a Granny to tell me stories...

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  3. Lovely fairy story, turning the bad guys on their heads, giving us a different point of view and with such elan.

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  4. This is extrembly clever. Such a delightful twist and difference from the usual form of fairy story. I do hope you are writing a series 🌹

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  5. Like how you've turned it around and the children are monsters. Great point of view choice - trolls!

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  6. This is great, loved the trolls!

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  7. Grandma troll telling a scary story with humans and fairies - I love it.

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  8. Fantastic! Love everything about this!

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  9. Oh, yes, it is twisty, alright. The best kind. And a fried human ear with sludge - such a yummy treat.

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  10. Intriguing, suspenseful, funny, and full of charm. I really enjoyed your story. Of course, I desperately want to know the plight of the fairy.

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  11. Sure have to watch those little poop machines, they can be the monsters indeed with their mitts and germs haha and to fairies. All depends on the point of view indeed.

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  12. Hiya Donna, absolutely clever girl! For a rushed second option, you've excelled yourself. 'Ten year old developing serial killers can be so needy and attention seeking!' Ha de ha. No blood, but fried human ears! Should we warn tender ones of that? This flash has charm, such a charming Grannie and charming little troll baby. Love her pulling the moss around herself.

    Thanks for posting for WEP. Always wonderful to have you. I hope you've already got your blood-sucking brain turned on for October!

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  13. fantastic story. I was sad when there was no more to read.

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  14. Liz: thanks

    EC: My favorite part of being a grandma is telling them bed time stories!

    Thanks Kalpana

    Lost: no series, just a fun writing session. Glad you liked it.

    Alex: thanks! I love turning tables with POV

    Sally: I waffled between goblins and trolls, lol

    L Diane: glad you liked it, thanks

    Jemi: very sweet of you :)

    Olga: it was almost human feet - toes specifically. Thought that might be a bit ticklish to pull off though . . .

    Pearson: the fairy plight is a story for another time :)

    Pat: ah, the runny-nosed kid! Maybe Granny should have dipped her ears in baby boogers!

    Dx: lol, took a long time to figure out what a rock troll might use for a blanket. So happy I charmed you :)

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  15. Toast: Excellent! A good story leaves the reader wanting more :)

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  16. Hi Donna - yes more would be nice on Fairy Jam - but please leave out the food!! Fascinating take on - Granny is obviously very good at telling stories ... cheers Hilary

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  17. This was such a clever and fun little story! I was just as eager to hear about what happened to the fairy as Gwenda was. Well done!

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  18. Awww... Gwenda is so cute! I'm actually curious about what happened to the little fairy.

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  19. I had to drop back to see your newly secured blog site - happy dance!!!

    Jenny @ Pearson Report

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  20. what a wonderfully fun story! now I'm intrigued to find out if the fairy is still in the jar!

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  21. Nothing like silencing those developing serial killers, Donna with a change of tack. Troll folktale with scary children. Cleverly crafted, taking fairy tale tropes and sidestepping with them. Green Fairy Jam sounds wonderfully revolting - one a rock cake. Next WEP post?

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  22. Hi,
    A very interesting children story.. Well written and engaging. it kept me reading until the end. I wanted to hear what happened to the fairy. Did she escape? I kept wondering if there was more. Good job.

    Shalom aleichem,
    Pat G

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  23. WILD THING ~
    Wow! & Double-Wow!! I just now learned more about Fireflies, Fairies, Rock Trolls and... Children... than I ever knew before.

    Who knew learning could be so entertaining?!

    ~ D-FensDogG
    STMcC Presents BATTLE OF THE BANDS

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  24. It's always refreshing to get an alternate view on the whole monster idea; plus, I really like fairy stories. This is fun. Nicely done.

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  25. I would wish for an entire book of Fairy tales like this! Loved the imagery, the relationship between Granny and Gwenda, and that great ending when both go to sleep, leaving the reader (me!) wondering what's coming next! Thank you.

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  26. An almost old-fashioned style fairy tale, with an interesting point of view for how the story is told. Well done.

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  27. Fun and clever and super charming, Donna! Loved it totally. The best part of grandmas, human and non-human, is the bottomless storytelling. :)

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  28. Loved the unexpected turn, like the jam. Great story

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  29. Hey guys! Sorry I'm late replying to comments.

    Hilary: so . . squishing fairies into jam is ok, but fried human ears is not? LOL. Thought you were a farm girl :)

    LG: Thanks!

    Bernadette: I'm a little curious for Gwenda to have an adventure and discover the Fairy fate myself.

    Cie: hehehehehehe

    Jenny: thanks for the help :)

    Cindi: thanks; curiosity is a good thing.

    Roland: the little brat, lol! Halloween - October - is my favorite month for horror. My birthday month. No way little Gwenda could satisfy my horror writing need.

    Pat: Thanks; childrens is not my genre at all, so I'm glad this worked out so well.

    Saint Mac: Right! I had one question about fire flies to ask Google, and boom - down the educational tunnel I dove without hesitation :)

    Toi: thanks. I love twisted fairy tales myself.

    Beth: you are welcome. Thanks for the high praise, much appreciated. Nice to meet you.

    Chris: I love Grimm's fairy tales, and not the Disney adaptations :)

    Nila: I agree; being a story telling Gma myself :)

    Edix: thank you

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  30. A wonderful fairy tale. I enjoyed the grisly imagery of trolls eating human ears and cuddling up to petrified rats! Poor fairies being squished and made into jam. So deliciously dark and funny.

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  31. Well, this was fun, Dolora. I loved the food assortment and the images of Trolls. Very clever.

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